Needs a LOT of work
That's an okay idea you have there but since there's very little development and that you only use whole notes and half notes (with the exception of the section with the staccato), it gets very boring after a while. The ending doesn't use a proper cadence. And I don't think it's possible to play this on a solo violin, since violins are generally built to play only one unharmonized line of melody.
Overall unextraordinary and premature.
I'm still just experimenting, trying out different ways of making music with a computer program. Most of all I'm trying to express myself, not bind myself to how other people think the music should be played. You've made me realise this, and for that I thank you.
Also, thanks for taking the time and to effort to write your comment. I appreciate it.
meh...
it's okay. i feel like i've heard the beginning a thousand times before, but the synths do take you somewhere semi-interesting. i kinda liked the tapping but it just didn't feel right for the song. i thought the song overall had no real drive or point to it if you know what i mean.
so in short, lose the tapping and try a different beginning and try to add a little reverb and other effects to make it stand out more.
also, you have good ideas. you should upgrade to more realistic sounds as soon as you have the money. as I may have said to you before, the production and sound of instruments will usually make or break the song.
Well in my opinion, the tapping was a funny and great idea. I don't regret putting it in, it makes anybody listening to it smile.
I can't buy Logic pro, for god sake!! :P Don't vote low because I'm money lacking!
Much better!
Wow dude. This composition is actually a lot better because there was a build up to it. Impressive for one hour's work.
Now, I recommend you do something about the sound. I know all you have is Garageband and, as you put it, "a stinky midi keyboard," but if you can upgrade to this program I use called Logic Pro 8, it will make your music sound, like, 10x better. The organ is smooth but it doesn't sound all that real.
Heck I know. GarageBand doesn't quite do the job with real instruments. Logic Pro 8...
Dude, it's $500. That's far too expansive, considering GarageBand came with the Mac I bought. :P I'll try to get it though if I can, but you've got to understand that for the moment I'm too short on dollars to consider buying such a program XP
Glad you liked it though. I tried making a small story into it and well, yep, it all entered in an hour. Thanks again!
hmm..
I dunno... I like what you have here. I know this is one of your first compositions and it shows. I would suggest making a bit longer and make sure the melody doesn't stray off in the middle of the song (which it did). Here's an idea: apply the sonata format. In case you don't know, this is the sonata format:
A ("exposition"): Statement of the first theme, transition into a second theme which is in a different key (if the first theme is minor, the second theme is the major key of that minor (ex. C minor to C major)), same transition melody. Repeat.
B ("development"): Anything goes. For this part, I recommend variations of the first theme. That way, it sticks out more in the listener's mind
A' ("recapitulation"): Big restatement of A, except both themes are in the same key now.
Yeah this format is very classical-y but apply it to your music and see how it works. It works for me. If you have any questions, don't be a stranger and ask. My door is always open :)
Sonata? Well, I've never heard of that! But it's kind of hard to think about something you don't know when you improvise all your way through the song! :P It sounds a bit complicated, even though I'm no professional pianist. I'll try to see your songs and try it out if I can, if not, you'll get a nice PM from me. :P Thanks for the help, I really appreciate it!
Cool
I kinda like it. The structure of the song is obviously very basic and it gets boring after a while but you seem to have something good going on here. I would definitely spend some more time on it if I were you. If you can play the drums irl, then you def should.
i can play drums irl, it would be my main instrument if i had a drum kit. but right now i just use friends' drumsets and sometimes i go to music stores and use theirs... just a matter of time.
thanx for the review man, i actually love the criticism. it tells me where i need to improve.
this isn't the final version either, but ya, when i get the final done, i might add vocals too and upload it again. this would actually be the first real recording i have done. all my other stuff (i have tons i just haven't uploaded yet, cuz no vocals, and the tracks feel empty without them) is synthesized.
Yo what up?
What I liked: I really liked the track quite a bit actually. And I liked what you said in your description. What I got from the song was emptiness and uncertainty and when a song gives you emotions, it's definitely a good one. I'm pretty sure other reviewers would tell you to turn up the guitar, but I actually like it the way it is. It adds to the meaning of your song.
How to improve: I would suggest doing some remastering to the track because I can hear the white noise. You were not playing in time. Try playing this song with a metronome and try and make it more metronome friendly. Also, try adding percussion and chords, but if you think that'll conflict with your song's meaning, you don't have to. One more tip: the riff you did at :06 seemed out of place. Try making it more of a composition than a song, if you know what I mean. I mean, spend more time with it. Compose it. Make your music with love and care!
Peace, adompeace
Edit: I did some remastering, I got it to add a little backround effect instead of just white noise. The other parts, I did a lot of work on the second version, but it seems people are more fond of this one, from votes. So i'm not sure what to do with this from now.
1. Ya, the program actually has a metronome to put on while the song is on. The only problem is I have no idea how to get the tempo I need for the feel of this song.
I'll use it anyway though.
2. I added a note in the backround just to mix, I only had the note play when the main part had notes high enough so it wouldn't seem out of place. I would like to add chords, but unfourtunatly, I took a scale that is rarely used, so the only way I can think of adding chords is just to make them out of notes in the scale.
3. This song was something I used to remember a scale, so didn't really have a plan of how to put everything together correctly. So I am probably going to redo the song, but it's going to sound a bit different. Personally, as long as it has the same feel to it, it's cool with me, the scale can do that itself.
And thanks for the review, it's good to get some critisizm, and not just people voting it down or up for no reason.
Nice...
Hey it's me. The keyboard shredding guy. You've got some really cool and original riffs here. The solo was very cool, my friend. The wah was pretty trippy. All I can say is up the tempo of the song by 10 or something. Normally I would say the drum beat was kinda too reminiscent of rap for me but the beat somehow worked well with your riffs. Very well done, man. :)
Maybe we could collaborate on a song of some sort sometime
hell yeah dude, Id gladly collab anything with you! thanx for da review, i really aprecciate it
Yo!
That was really tight, man! Really well composed. How long did this take you? We should compose something together sometime! I play all genres of piano (usually classical).
XGEN0CID3, if you don't like classical, then why would you click on something that says "Cello Concerto No. 1?" Even you should know what's coming, idiot.
Don't listen to him, his mind is too feeble to understand classical music.
Hey!
Glad you liked it. This movement took me maybe 2 months. Yeah, it takes a long time. :) Yeah we should collab sometimes, definitely!
I'm not worried about XGEN0CID3 really. There's sadly always someone who doesn't like Classical, and yeah he should've known, but oh well.
I'm glad you liked it, again. Thanks for the review.
-Rocky
Wow. Just...wow
You thought my "Call of Ktulu" arrangements were good? This is really great. It's not flashy. It's just right. And you need help with arrangements? I can do orchestral arrangements for you if you'd like.
Thanks! means a lot!, i'd love if you can make some arrangements, I'm sure it will sound great, thnks again!
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